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Bosch Clone Story

I have decided to continue with my story of the Bosch clone. If you where looking under the " Might Wanna..." Topic, you would see about a screen long paragraph of a story i have created. Since i liked it so far, I'm making post here that will have to do with the story. I dont have a part 3 yet, but I think I will have it today for you guys.


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Bosch Clone Story

I have decided to continue with my story of the Bosch clone. If you where looking under the " Might Wanna..." Topic, you would see about a screen long paragraph of a story i have created. Since i liked it so far, I'm making post here that will have to do with the story. I dont have a part 3 yet, but I think I will have it today for you guys.


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ok guys here is the next part to the Bosch clone story.

Part 3... The Great Escape.

Bosch had now awaken from his sleep. His eyes hurt from playing last night, and his wrists throb in pain from the struggle late last night. He didn't need to hurt himself more, so he decided not to try to get out of the the strait jacket yet, but he couldn't even if he wanted to, for at that moment, five guards had calmly open the heavy steel door and walked in. These guys were not normal guards, they had pistols in there holsters. One of them had hand-cuffs, another had leg-cuffs, and the rest had either shotguns or tasers. Since the asylum thought that they could cure Bosch, they kept him here for many years, but even after many extensive programs, it seemed that they couldn't change him, he thought that he was really the Admiral Bosch from Freespace. His real name was Thomas Kalvin. He lived in the United States, in Baton Rouge, Louisiana. He lived with his wife Martha. Tom worked at a Macrosoft computer company. One day he got ahold of a copy of Freespace2. He played with it on weekends when he wasnt working, but soon it got much deeper than that. Weeks later, he started building models of ships from the Freespace universe. Soon after that, he started skipping work, until his boss called and fired him. Without work, Tom had more time to spend with Freespace. Sometimes he would lock himself in the computer room for hours. This happened very few times, but then it started to become a daily event. Soon his wife started to get worried, so she called the doctor to come to see what was wrong with Tom. When the doctor got there, he tried get in the room, finally he had to bust the door down. Tom was sitting in front of the computer, with joystick in hand, blowing up Shivans. The doctor tried to get Tom off of the computer, but when he did, Tom started lashing out at him. He started throwing books and old pop bottles at him, the doctor called the Police. They came within minutes of the call. After much struggling. The Police removed Tom from the house, but Tom was holding the computer tightly in his hands, so they let him have it. When they put him in the asylum, Tom had swore revenge to the Terran race for being so unfair to him. Tom had to go by another name of a person so evil, so he pick one from the Freespace universe. Admiral Aken Bosch. Now Tom has forgotten about his past as Tom Kalvin, and looks on to the future as Bosch. Now Bosch was now sitting on the floor of his cell. The guards come and release him from his jacket. They latch on the cuffs to his wrists and ankles. Bosch was being taken from his cell to be executed. Now they walk slowly down the hall to the room with the needle that would silence him forever. Just as the guards were about to open the door, the wall next to them blasted open. Men dressed in uniforms came in with lasers and assault rifles. They grabed Bosch and ran out. Now the Guards and the entire compound were on their tail. Bosch was starting to get tired from all the running, thats when they came to an open field. They all stopped there. Bosch says "why did we stop? They are going to get us if we stay here!" one of the men said "Don't worry, our ride will get here soon!" at that moment, Bosch noticed what they were wearing. Most of the men had body armor of some sort, but on all their uniforms, they had the words "Neo Terran Front" on them. Then an Argo class ship decended from the skies. The men pushed Bosch on the ship. The guards from the asylum had now caught up with them, and started firing. Loki class fighters had then appeared and started firing on the guards. Once Bosch and the men were on board, the ship ascended to the limits of the sky until it disappeared into space. The Loki's follow behind. When they reached space, the ship started to vibrate. The helm said "Now entering Sub-Space."
Then the Argo, The Loki's, and all the men on board, disappeared in the blue and white swirling vortex of sub-space.


TO BE CONTINUED...

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ok guys here is the next part to the Bosch clone story.

Part 3... The Great Escape.

Bosch had now awaken from his sleep. His eyes hurt from playing last night, and his wrists throb in pain from the struggle late last night. He didn't need to hurt himself more, so he decided not to try to get out of the the strait jacket yet, but he couldn't even if he wanted to, for at that moment, five guards had calmly open the heavy steel door and walked in. These guys were not normal guards, they had pistols in there holsters. One of them had hand-cuffs, another had leg-cuffs, and the rest had either shotguns or tasers. Since the asylum thought that they could cure Bosch, they kept him here for many years, but even after many extensive programs, it seemed that they couldn't change him, he thought that he was really the Admiral Bosch from Freespace. His real name was Thomas Kalvin. He lived in the United States, in Baton Rouge, Louisiana. He lived with his wife Martha. Tom worked at a Macrosoft computer company. One day he got ahold of a copy of Freespace2. He played with it on weekends when he wasnt working, but soon it got much deeper than that. Weeks later, he started building models of ships from the Freespace universe. Soon after that, he started skipping work, until his boss called and fired him. Without work, Tom had more time to spend with Freespace. Sometimes he would lock himself in the computer room for hours. This happened very few times, but then it started to become a daily event. Soon his wife started to get worried, so she called the doctor to come to see what was wrong with Tom. When the doctor got there, he tried get in the room, finally he had to bust the door down. Tom was sitting in front of the computer, with joystick in hand, blowing up Shivans. The doctor tried to get Tom off of the computer, but when he did, Tom started lashing out at him. He started throwing books and old pop bottles at him, the doctor called the Police. They came within minutes of the call. After much struggling. The Police removed Tom from the house, but Tom was holding the computer tightly in his hands, so they let him have it. When they put him in the asylum, Tom had swore revenge to the Terran race for being so unfair to him. Tom had to go by another name of a person so evil, so he pick one from the Freespace universe. Admiral Aken Bosch. Now Tom has forgotten about his past as Tom Kalvin, and looks on to the future as Bosch. Now Bosch was now sitting on the floor of his cell. The guards come and release him from his jacket. They latch on the cuffs to his wrists and ankles. Bosch was being taken from his cell to be executed. Now they walk slowly down the hall to the room with the needle that would silence him forever. Just as the guards were about to open the door, the wall next to them blasted open. Men dressed in uniforms came in with lasers and assault rifles. They grabed Bosch and ran out. Now the Guards and the entire compound were on their tail. Bosch was starting to get tired from all the running, thats when they came to an open field. They all stopped there. Bosch says "why did we stop? They are going to get us if we stay here!" one of the men said "Don't worry, our ride will get here soon!" at that moment, Bosch noticed what they were wearing. Most of the men had body armor of some sort, but on all their uniforms, they had the words "Neo Terran Front" on them. Then an Argo class ship decended from the skies. The men pushed Bosch on the ship. The guards from the asylum had now caught up with them, and started firing. Loki class fighters had then appeared and started firing on the guards. Once Bosch and the men were on board, the ship ascended to the limits of the sky until it disappeared into space. The Loki's follow behind. When they reached space, the ship started to vibrate. The helm said "Now entering Sub-Space."
Then the Argo, The Loki's, and all the men on board, disappeared in the blue and white swirling vortex of sub-space.


TO BE CONTINUED...

Feedback please.

~Viper~
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I have read other stories, and some have something that mine doesnt, SPEECH. There is almost no talking. If this is the problem, I can fix it, I'm just disappointed that no one told me this. :< no one was kind enough to tell me this, and this makes me mad. I hope you enjoy the rest of the story and its improvement.

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I have read other stories, and some have something that mine doesnt, SPEECH. There is almost no talking. If this is the problem, I can fix it, I'm just disappointed that no one told me this. :< no one was kind enough to tell me this, and this makes me mad. I hope you enjoy the rest of the story and its improvement.

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Its a story narrative...it doesn't have to have speech persay.

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Its a story narrative...it doesn't have to have speech persay.

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isnt as funny/sacastic as the start

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If the story is funny all the time, then eventually you would run out of things to make it a successful funny, unless you worked as some Joker/fool. Plus i think a story that has too much funny in it, gets boring after awhile. I hope you guys didn't think my story was boring. Do you guys like the plot so far?

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If the story is funny all the time, then eventually you would run out of things to make it a successful funny, unless you worked as some Joker/fool. Plus i think a story that has too much funny in it, gets boring after awhile. I hope you guys didn't think my story was boring. Do you guys like the plot so far?

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This is in the wrong forum, no?

Overall..it was, hm, interesting.

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This is in the wrong forum, no?

Overall..it was, hm, interesting.

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Nope, correct forum.

The Bosch think-he-is is locked up by the BWO team, it belongs here.

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Nope, correct forum.

The Bosch think-he-is is locked up by the BWO team, it belongs here.

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Bosch was huddled in the corner of the Argo, recollecting with what just happened. He had achived his ultimate goal of getting out of the asylum, but how he got out was far beyond what he expected. One of the marines approached Bosch.

Marine:Tom Kalvin?

Bosch: The names Admiral Aken Bosch.

Marine: Well Bosch, uh, sir, we feel we that its time to explain
everything thats going on sir.

Bosch:Well get on with it.

Marine: Sir, we have been fighting against the GTVA for who knows how many years. Even though we put up a good fight, we are still losing the war, but that was before the Shivans arrived.

Bosch: Don't bother me with something I already know.

Marine: O'yea sorry sir, well anyway. Can you tell us then how you escaped form the Shivans? (thinking)(If I talk to him like this, then maybe he won't blow his stack, lets see how he tells us his story. We already know the real Bosch is dead, so we needed a replacement, and who better than a person who really thinks that his him.)

Bosch:...I don't remember how i escaped from the Shivans. I was taken to their transport ship, and I watch as the Iceni disappeared into the nebula, and thats all I remember... THE ICENI!!! IS IT STILL OKAY!!!

Marine: (thinking)(uh oh, he aint going to like this.) Well, uh, to be honest, no. It was destroyed by the Shivans.

Bosch: YOU BASTARD, HOW COULD YOU LET IT GET DESTROYED! ARGGGHHHHHH!!!

Marine:Sir, please calm down.

Bosch: CALM DOWN? I'LL GIVE YOU CALM DOWN( he punches the marine in the gut.) THATS FOR LOSING THE ICENI!

Marine:but..sir..wait..I..have..good news.

Helm: Now exiting Sub-Space.

Bosch's anger had suddenly disappeared when he saw what was out his window. He was taken to the NTF's main headquarters

Marine:Now do you like what you see sir?

Bosch: Yes, you boys sure were working hard while I was gone.

Bosch saw perhaps thousands of fighters and bombers. Hundreds of crusiers. Dozens of Iceni's and Demos'. A handful of Orion and Hecate Destroyers, but one ship stood out the most in this huge armada. Above all of them was the Terran Juggernaut thought to be destroyed by a Shivan Super Juggernaut, but it was different than before, it had red and black hull plating instead of the normal tan plating.

Bosch: What is that ship? I thought is was destroyed, but now that i look at it , its different.

Marine: That is a project we have been working on for quite some time now. Its like the original, but we have fused it with Shivan Hull plates, so it has twice as much armour as before. The weaponry on it is Shivan, but we need to tweak it up though, because the weapons dont want to work when we want it to. So we may need to replace it with terran weaponry.

Bosch: What are we going to call it?

Marine: Well since you are the leader and all sir, I think its appropriate that you do the honors.

Bosch: Well, hmmm... I got it!

The Argo transport now was right next to the juggernaut. After giving a speech as to how they were going to destroy the GTVA, Bosch exited the Argo in a space suit and hovered next to the juggernaut.

Bosch:I dubb this ship, The NTF Martha.................. just kidding. I dubb this ship, The NTF Hellscream.

With saying that, Bosch then hits the ship with a bottle of Champange. He returns to he Argo ship, and the NTF Hellscream comes to life


TO BE CONTINUE...


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Bosch was huddled in the corner of the Argo, recollecting with what just happened. He had achived his ultimate goal of getting out of the asylum, but how he got out was far beyond what he expected. One of the marines approached Bosch.

Marine:Tom Kalvin?

Bosch: The names Admiral Aken Bosch.

Marine: Well Bosch, uh, sir, we feel we that its time to explain
everything thats going on sir.

Bosch:Well get on with it.

Marine: Sir, we have been fighting against the GTVA for who knows how many years. Even though we put up a good fight, we are still losing the war, but that was before the Shivans arrived.

Bosch: Don't bother me with something I already know.

Marine: O'yea sorry sir, well anyway. Can you tell us then how you escaped form the Shivans? (thinking)(If I talk to him like this, then maybe he won't blow his stack, lets see how he tells us his story. We already know the real Bosch is dead, so we needed a replacement, and who better than a person who really thinks that his him.)

Bosch:...I don't remember how i escaped from the Shivans. I was taken to their transport ship, and I watch as the Iceni disappeared into the nebula, and thats all I remember... THE ICENI!!! IS IT STILL OKAY!!!

Marine: (thinking)(uh oh, he aint going to like this.) Well, uh, to be honest, no. It was destroyed by the Shivans.

Bosch: YOU BASTARD, HOW COULD YOU LET IT GET DESTROYED! ARGGGHHHHHH!!!

Marine:Sir, please calm down.

Bosch: CALM DOWN? I'LL GIVE YOU CALM DOWN( he punches the marine in the gut.) THATS FOR LOSING THE ICENI!

Marine:but..sir..wait..I..have..good news.

Helm: Now exiting Sub-Space.

Bosch's anger had suddenly disappeared when he saw what was out his window. He was taken to the NTF's main headquarters

Marine:Now do you like what you see sir?

Bosch: Yes, you boys sure were working hard while I was gone.

Bosch saw perhaps thousands of fighters and bombers. Hundreds of crusiers. Dozens of Iceni's and Demos'. A handful of Orion and Hecate Destroyers, but one ship stood out the most in this huge armada. Above all of them was the Terran Juggernaut thought to be destroyed by a Shivan Super Juggernaut, but it was different than before, it had red and black hull plating instead of the normal tan plating.

Bosch: What is that ship? I thought is was destroyed, but now that i look at it , its different.

Marine: That is a project we have been working on for quite some time now. Its like the original, but we have fused it with Shivan Hull plates, so it has twice as much armour as before. The weaponry on it is Shivan, but we need to tweak it up though, because the weapons dont want to work when we want it to. So we may need to replace it with terran weaponry.

Bosch: What are we going to call it?

Marine: Well since you are the leader and all sir, I think its appropriate that you do the honors.

Bosch: Well, hmmm... I got it!

The Argo transport now was right next to the juggernaut. After giving a speech as to how they were going to destroy the GTVA, Bosch exited the Argo in a space suit and hovered next to the juggernaut.

Bosch:I dubb this ship, The NTF Martha.................. just kidding. I dubb this ship, The NTF Hellscream.

With saying that, Bosch then hits the ship with a bottle of Champange. He returns to he Argo ship, and the NTF Hellscream comes to life


TO BE CONTINUE...


~Viper~

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What, you dont like the name i came up with?

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